Here's an item I wrote for my blog tour last spring, in anticipation of THE KILLING CLUB's imminent publication. I can't quite remember now which site it appeared on, but for this article I was specifically asked to offer tips to writers looking to create tension, terror, suspense, etc. A few months have gone since then, but hopefully this advice, such as it is, will still be of some use (plus DEAD MAN WALKING is due to hit the shelves next month, so with luck this will be a timely retread). If anyone hasn't already read this piece, it might be of interest:
One
of the things my thriller writing has won most praise for is its creation of
terror and suspense. If true, this obviously works in my favour: I’m a career
writer, thrillers are my forte, and thrillers wouldn’t be thrillers if they
weren’t able to keep their audiences on the edges of their seats.
But how do you go about doing this? How
do you make your readers too frightened to turn the page but at the same time
desperate to know what happens next?
Well … I can only respond by outlining
my own experience and process.
The reality is that, as with any mood a
writer is seeking to evoke – be it romance, mystery, comedy – you need to work
on it thoughtfully, and construct it with attention to detail. Sometimes of
course you get lucky and stumble on scenarios that are tense and frightening
simply because they are. But most of the time it doesn’t work like that. You’ve
got to remember that your readers aren’t privy to your innermost fears and
doubts, so a lot of the time situations you happen to find discomforting won’t
have the same effect on them; it’s basically about leaving nothing to chance - the masters of the form never do.
Stephen King’s chilling short story, The Ledge, tells the tale of an ordinary
man who falls foul of the mob and is forced to walk around the exterior of a
skyscraper penthouse along a seven-inch shelf. It’s a nightmare scenario by any
standards, but King works it for everything he can, page after page, ensuring
we are with this guy each foot of the way, experiencing his every near-slip,
his every stab of pain as pigeons peck at his ankles.
For the sheer stress it puts the reader
through, this is one of the great pieces of thriller fiction. It is literally
exhausting to read it. But what are the ingredients of successful scenes like
this? Well, there are four essential boxes I always feel I need to tick.
Character.
Threat.
Situation.
Atmosphere.
In
terms of character, it’s never going
to work if the readers don’t like your protagonist. By that, I don’t mean you
have to like them, as in make them
someone you’d enjoy going on a dinner date with. You can be repelled by them;
they can be thoroughly objectionable. But they’ve got to be real, someone whose personality and
motivations are clear and accessible, otherwise it won’t be possible for the
reader to invest emotionally in their fate.
Now, if the characters concerned are
central figures in your book or script, this is probably going to happen anyway
because you’ll have had plenty time to develop them. However, many characters
in thriller and horror writing are short-lived. These are the victims, the guys
in red shirts who always go down to the planet surface in the Star Trek landing party so they can
serve the purpose of being killed while Kirk and Spock get away. Those faceless
he-men in red shirts worked fine back in those days because it was all so new.
Trust me, it wouldn’t be so effective now – audiences are more sophisticated.
If your character is to be short-lived,
a victim just waiting to get the chop, you’ve still got to give him or her a
back-story. I don’t mean you should overload it chapter on chapter, but take a
little time to give us a glimpse of their humanity. They may have a spouse
waiting for them, they may have kids at home, they may be struggling at work,
or to find work – above all, they have feelings, they can be hurt.
All this makes them much easier to
sympathise with and root for.
And they don’t have to be overtly
vulnerable. A confused OAP or a lost child will always win your readers’ vote;
it’s easy to fear for them. But look at John Boorman’s movie, Deliverance, in which the heroes were
four red-blooded guys on an outdoors adventure, and yet we got to know them so
well that we empathised with them hugely as they fought desperately for
survival.
(And this is another thing. Don’t be
frightened to strip your characters down to their raw emotions. Think of the
impact the opening scene in Jaws had,
when the poor lass, whilst under attack by the shark, screamed hoarsely for God
to help her. It’s a tragic and frightening scene even today, the sight of this
modern, free-spirited girl plunged into this nightmare of nightmares from which
she instinctively knows there’ll be no escape – don’t be afraid to upset your
readers; that’s what they’ve bought your book for).
With
regard to threat, this will be the
keystone of your thriller anyway.
I’m not here to tell you how to create a
great villain; that’s an art-form in itself. And you certainly won’t need me to
advise you about scenarios of indescribable horror; they are around us all day,
on news bulletins. I will say this – whether your threat be a person, an
animal, a supernatural entity, or an everyday predicament – you can’t make it
too terrible.
Remember how this works. You’re asking
your readers to follow these characters they now know and love, as they walk
unwittingly into peril.
The readers, of course, will have an idea what’s going to happen because you’ve prepared the ground for them, but shout and scream though they may, the characters can’t hear them. And yet this intense experience is only going to occur if the menace is real and tangible. So for example, in Susan Hill’s The Woman In Black (the British TV version of which is pictured right), if Arthur Kipps was being forced to spend time alone at Eel Marsh House and there was lots of mist around and he felt very isolated – sure, it would be spooky. But how much more spooky is it when the audience know in advance that this house is the abode of a hateful spirit that will seek to destroy him?
The readers, of course, will have an idea what’s going to happen because you’ve prepared the ground for them, but shout and scream though they may, the characters can’t hear them. And yet this intense experience is only going to occur if the menace is real and tangible. So for example, in Susan Hill’s The Woman In Black (the British TV version of which is pictured right), if Arthur Kipps was being forced to spend time alone at Eel Marsh House and there was lots of mist around and he felt very isolated – sure, it would be spooky. But how much more spooky is it when the audience know in advance that this house is the abode of a hateful spirit that will seek to destroy him?
Yet, while I say don’t be shy about
making your threat monstrous, that doesn’t mean you can’t be subtle as well. In
fact, subtlety can raise the stakes dramatically – and this lesson goes back to
the earliest days of thriller writing. In the poem Beowulf, which dates to the 6th century, the monster
Grendel is never physically described; it is simply an unstoppable something
that comes out of the darkness, and on one occasion leaves 30 butchered
victims. That you don’t know what it looks like – in other words you can’t
mentally quantify the nature of the menace, despite the carnage it leaves
behind – is all the more terrifying. And there are myriad examples of this in modern
times, from the classic opening 30 minutes of the sci-fi horror Them! in 1954, when we’ve no idea what
murdered the family in the camper fan and left the little girl deranged, to the
modern serial killer thriller, Se7en
(1995) when the detectives battle haplessly with a faceless madman who is
always streets ahead of them.
Conversely, in Thomas Harris’s Hannibal
novels, we know full well what Hannibal Lector looks like and who he is, but
his urbane charm is utterly disorienting – this smiling villain is surely too
nice to be capable of such horrors, yet we know from the outset that he isn’t.
With a simple look across the dinner table, this guy can freeze the blood.
To sum up, your menace doesn’t have to
come in shouting and roaring – you don’t even have to see it – but it has to be
immense. Believe me, your readership can take as much as you can give them, and
will thank you all the more for it.
The
next tick-box is situation.
That may sound as if it speaks for
itself. But the important element here is believability. To a certain extent,
this may already by driven by one of our previous criteria: character. If the
readers empathise with your characters you can get away with almost anything. Dr Who is a great example. The Doctor visits
the most outlandish locations and faces scenarios which, even in sci-fi terms,
verge on the completely ridiculous, yet the audience has bought so much into
his character that even the most unlikely threats seem plausible.
That said, an audience’s familiarity
with an environment will never hurt. One of our great crime novels, Jack’s Return Home, by Ted Lewis, is set
in Scunthorpe of all places, a working class town with which many British readers
were easily able to identify, but in which the gangster-infested pool halls and
massage parlours suddenly seemed a public nuisance rather than a common
backdrop to urban life. When Mike Hodges adapted it as Get Carter! in 1971, he shifted it to the even more grimly
picturesque city of Newcastle, and how effective was that? The land of tower
blocks and dark Satanic mills – previously in British cinema the home of
kitchen-sink dramas – was suddenly tailor-made for the crime thriller medium.
However, it’s equally important that your characters are in these environments
for convincing reasons. In Jack’s Return
Home, Jack Carter is an underworld figure from the get-go, heading north to
investigate the death of his brother, which brings him into direct conflict
with the local firms. No British crime reader was going to query that.
In another British crime novel of that era, The Siege of Trencher’s Farm (later adapted by Sam Peckinpah as Straw Dogs, left), an intellectual couple in an isolated house on the scenic Cornish moors fall foul of a local mob when they seek to protect a sex-offender – that is a disturbingly realistic scenario, which is even more likely to happen in real life now than it was then.
Not to labour this point, but I’m going to break one of my own rules now, and tell you something I think you shouldn’t do rather than something you should. Modern thriller narratives are traditionally filled with moments of idiocy by the characters, a device often used to move the plot along. For example, there’s a killer out there, so what do the characters do? – they split up. Or how about they hear strange and terrifying noises – and go and investigate. As I mentioned earlier, modern audiences are a bit too sophisticated for that, and if a situation is too unbelievable or contrived, it will result in sniggers rather than screams.
In another British crime novel of that era, The Siege of Trencher’s Farm (later adapted by Sam Peckinpah as Straw Dogs, left), an intellectual couple in an isolated house on the scenic Cornish moors fall foul of a local mob when they seek to protect a sex-offender – that is a disturbingly realistic scenario, which is even more likely to happen in real life now than it was then.
Not to labour this point, but I’m going to break one of my own rules now, and tell you something I think you shouldn’t do rather than something you should. Modern thriller narratives are traditionally filled with moments of idiocy by the characters, a device often used to move the plot along. For example, there’s a killer out there, so what do the characters do? – they split up. Or how about they hear strange and terrifying noises – and go and investigate. As I mentioned earlier, modern audiences are a bit too sophisticated for that, and if a situation is too unbelievable or contrived, it will result in sniggers rather than screams.
So, by all means, put them in scary
predicaments, but authenticity is, and always will be, the key to making your
readers feel the danger themselves.
Lastly,
but possibly most important of all, is atmosphere.
And in some ways this is the hardest to pin down, because we tend to have preconceived
notions about it.
For example, a haunted house is only
going to be scary if it has gargoyles on its eaves and cobwebs in its windows.
A high crime district is only going to be believable if it has gang tags on its
wall and syringes in the gutters. Okay, all that kind of window-dressing may be
important, but I don’t think it’s essential. Let me give you two different
examples.
A pleasant coastal resort and the open
road. Couldn’t be less threatening, right?
Wrong.
In Robin Hardy’s The Wicker Man (1973), Summer Isle is a beautiful Scottish island
with a picture postcard village around its harbour. But that doesn’t prevent
you suspecting something awful is going to happen as various odd aspects of the
place slowly emerge to invoke a sense of evil.
In Richard Matheson’s breath-taking short story, Duel (as filmed by Stephen Spielberg, left), the setting is a sun-drenched motorway. Normal enough, except that this one is eerily empty – apart from our tired travelling salesman and the dirty old truck that unrelentingly teases and tortures him, in which scenario the sheer monotony of the long, deserted blacktop, the mere appearance of which saps hope and energy, becomes as much a foe as the maniac in the rear.
In Richard Matheson’s breath-taking short story, Duel (as filmed by Stephen Spielberg, left), the setting is a sun-drenched motorway. Normal enough, except that this one is eerily empty – apart from our tired travelling salesman and the dirty old truck that unrelentingly teases and tortures him, in which scenario the sheer monotony of the long, deserted blacktop, the mere appearance of which saps hope and energy, becomes as much a foe as the maniac in the rear.
So it’s not so much the locations, as how
they look, feel, and pluck at the nerves of your embattled characters.
A project relying on suspense will only
benefit from an atmosphere that makes its protagonists feel vulnerable and
oppresses the readers. In purely technical terms, there are lots of ways you
can achieve this: geographically (a tiny army base at the North Pole; a
beleaguered police station in the riot zone); meteorologically (snow, ice,
fog); even architecturally (an urban ghetto full of faceless buildings and
derelict subways, where the unseen attack could come from any direction).
However you do it, the key is creating a sense of isolation, strangeness and
menace, in which your characters feel small and insecure.
So,
at the end of the day … is that it? Is that how do you evoke tension, fear,
suspense?
Sadly, no.
These can only be basic guidelines. To
write effective suspense, you’ve still got to tauten your narrative and bring
pace to your prose. This is equally important to any of the above, if not more
so. One quick way to achieve this is to read your finished scenes onto tape,
and play them back. If they sound laborious and slow, that’s probably because they
are – in which case don’t be frightened to wield the hatchet, slicing out every
bit of text that doesn’t serve the purpose of creating tension. Save your
lovely descriptions and your characters’ thought processes for parts of the
book that don’t rely on nerve-shredding terror, because the last thing you want
to do at that stage is slow it all down.
Just
a few thoughts here. Not by any means the whole story, but one or two ideas
which, on the whole, seem to work for me, and which others, with luck, will
find useful and interesting.
Great advice. Thank you so much! :)
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